Fire(Haiku)

I've read that an excessive usage of present participle can get a haiku in trouble, while in this piece, you have managed to use them without complicating the subject. However I agree with Mera Luna that a haiku should present two juxtaposed parts in three lines where the last line should differ with the first two lines.

However, personally I think you did a good job there. The subject was well portrayed, and not a single word went as a subjective commentary, melting, burning, I think everyone can describe inferno as such. They say it takes up years before one could master the haiku form. Personally, I tried to perfect them as well, but I found it hard to really create that AHA moment.

Keep writing.

Nice, I have only recently come across Haiku, this was a great read for me as a beginner in the form. Thanks for sharing.

This was stunning, how each line brought some new type of imagery to the reader's eyes, simple yet effective. Well done, hope to read more from you.

Take care and God bless you always.

MaryAnne

Jad... I am not much one for Haiku but I am drawn to this one. Interesting how one of lifes most basic elements can be used for supporting life and destroying it. Well written, thanks for sharing