Your Lover

by silvershoes   Sep 12, 2010


When you hear your name slip sweetly from her mouth,
Dripping in beads of nectar, her azucar;
When she whispers gently, 'nene,'
And she moves her body heat towards yours.
When she melts her hands into your palms;
When she lifts your fingers to her kiss, softly brushes the tips to her lips,
Her eyes never leaving yours, blinking in that slow, loving way...
Do you wonder like I do if she was me and you were you?

When you hear your name fall bitterly from her mouth,
Doused in sour grains of sand, her sal;
When she screams in fury, 'te odio,'
And moves her cold body out of your reach.
When she slaps you careless across the cheek;
When she spits venom that burns your heart, rips your rosy world apart,
Her eyes bloodshot right into yours, blinking tears in that hateful way...
Do you wonder like I do if she was me and you were you?

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  • 14 years ago

    by Jad

    A interesting twist in the poem as I read the second stanza which caught me off guard, nicely done. I felt as if there where many emotions coming off this piece as there was and that for your first stanza you fill it up with feeling of love, joy, happiness, and completion. All of these were strongly felt I thought. Then came the second stanza which gave a twist as I said as the feelings turned to hate, sadness, sorrow, and depression giving the reader both sides of the reflection.

    "When she spits venom that burns your heart, rips your rosy world apart,
    Her eyes bloodshot right into yours, blinking tears in that hateful way..."

    By far this my favorite stanza as it gave a sense of hopelessness for the person being torn down. Once again your great word choice and ideas in this poem made it very unique. Also there was some good imagery in this one. I did not however see anything that really needed any changing. So all in all you did a wonderful job. Good job and keep writing.

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