by Nicko
Hi there i really enjoyed this poem, it is full of emotion and a travelled journey. It carries you along till the very end, Well done. Now this is first for me as I've never critiqued a poem like this and the last thing i want is to offend in anyway. You can even delete this comment, But this poem has a lot more potential so in brackets I have made some minor changes which in most cases is only deleting some filler words like and, has etc, in a couple of others I've suggested slight structure changes to give your poem more strength, but thats totally up to you as I like the poem anyway so take as little or as much as you like. |
by Reaper
Beautiful! :) 5/5 |