Comments : Bare-Boned

  • 14 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    The thing about your poetry is that it always has a voice and the image comes out alive..the title as well as the whole poem is
    well penned. LIked the read :)

  • 14 years ago

    by Soft Parade

    A triumph in my opinion, so many layers to the poem, I could revisit this poem over and over and read into it differently. Thanks for sharing a wonderful poem.

  • 14 years ago

    by Sunshine

    I love ur style..
    this poem was really written in a special way..and the word choice had this effective tense.

    well done..gd luck
    hope this wins :)
    5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Edward D Zurovec

    This is and outstanding poem, from the first stanza I teared up, because I know October nears, and I imagine myself rooted to the scenery, a weeping willow (my favorite tree)who sheds his sins with a quick shake of the wind, peering down to find my own foliage has settled with time, I think of all those secrets left unturned. Beautifully written, vivid imagery, I am there among the words.
    Peace and Blessings

  • 14 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Melissa,

    this poem is too short for me, I feel you could have expanded on this some more.

    It is well written, and I can see why people appreciate it so much, but for me personally it is too much like you are repeating a style which has proven to be succesful.

    There's something about the air in Fall,
    it begets this chill inside
    that longs to snuggle up with my pen

    ^^
    I can relate to this feeling, fall is my favorite season as well and especially when it starts to get foggy in the mornings and evenings that gives a really romantic touch to life.

    A very well done nonetheless:)

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 14 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    As they slowly percolate
    deep in frost
    so they also reincarnate
    bringing new revelations...

  • 14 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    I love the comparison of general nature to human nature . The free verse delivered beautifuly

  • 14 years ago

    by silvershoes

    Woo. I read this poem three times over in a row. I don't think I've ever done that.

    Your words and the imagery are so unbearably personal and relatable. It's like you've read into my soul and come up with the perfect metaphor.

    Thanks for writing this.

  • 14 years ago

    by Siglawoo

    A weeping willow
    who sheds her sins
    with a quick shake of the wind-

    i wish i had words to praise these lines.