Hey this was really good! I really liked the consistancy. It was very simple and to the point. and sometimes thats all you need to express an emotion. very well done!! 5/5!

I love poems with repetition, but you seemed to overdue it a bit with this piece. Realisticly you only had about 5 lines in the poem, I'm not saying it was terrible but you could've done more with this I believe....