Comments : Mine Sciamachy

  • 14 years ago

    by Jad

    This was indeed a fun one for sure. :] Let me start out with saying that your word choice was excellently picked out or you were throwing up a dictionary on this poem. A dictionary would be helpful when reading this also :] You had many vivid images in this piece and the emotions coming across this as the reader read was deep as it flowed throughout the entire poem.

    "Did I care for want of everything?
    No! Salient leapt I -
    Saltation at its finest.
    Saltigrade legs, bounding."

    This was by far my favorite line as it gave contradiction in itself and yet went together so perfectly. The thoughts you have put into this poem are varied as I read it many times over getting a slightly different message then before. Good job and keep writing.

  • 14 years ago

    by Lana

    When I first read this I thought you must have opened the dictionary on the "S" page and perhaps you did. After reading it a couple more times I got the impression that it could be like a one-man-show style of poetry to be read on stage or something. Forgive me if I'm wrong (I know it's posted in the love section) but I thought there was a lot of hidden humour in it, kind of black comedy if you know what I mean. Perhaps I've misread it but that's what comes to mind.

    I did enjoy it though, even if my interpretation is totally wrong.

  • 14 years ago

    by sibyllene

    Haha! Normally I have a peevish disdain for poems that look like they fell out of the thesaurus, but you took that idea and pusssshed it and made it work! The alliteration gives it a fun quality, and the words you used you used correctly and appropriately.

    Additionally, while this exercise could have left the poem wobbly and spastic in content, with that little glossary at hand, you realize that the matter of the poem retains some continuity. Logically, it makes sense. In effect, it's eccentric.