by Jad
This was indeed a fun one for sure. :] Let me start out with saying that your word choice was excellently picked out or you were throwing up a dictionary on this poem. A dictionary would be helpful when reading this also :] You had many vivid images in this piece and the emotions coming across this as the reader read was deep as it flowed throughout the entire poem. |
by Lana
When I first read this I thought you must have opened the dictionary on the "S" page and perhaps you did. After reading it a couple more times I got the impression that it could be like a one-man-show style of poetry to be read on stage or something. Forgive me if I'm wrong (I know it's posted in the love section) but I thought there was a lot of hidden humour in it, kind of black comedy if you know what I mean. Perhaps I've misread it but that's what comes to mind. |
by sibyllene
Haha! Normally I have a peevish disdain for poems that look like they fell out of the thesaurus, but you took that idea and pusssshed it and made it work! The alliteration gives it a fun quality, and the words you used you used correctly and appropriately. |