by Raven Sep 22, 2010
category :
Friendship, family /
broken friendship
Our friendship began when |
The depth that I witnessed in 'GANGS' wasn't there, which was a shame, because 'GANGS' was a great piece of writing. I think what didn't work for me personally, was the stilted flow. The rhymes was also not very strong in places. Saying that, though, your ending was the strongest part, and that's important. |