Ha! Lovely!( And begone is a word; as in woe begone...)

Ah Ha! So what do Totara, kowhai mean?

I really enjoyed reading this one, it was a pretty good example of free verse. one thing that bothered me just a tiny bit was the repetitive use of "youth" outside of any kind of discernable pattern, i think it was used 3 times throughout the poem butreally im just being nitpicky, honeslty it was very good.

Ahw, I Adored This Poem.
You Have Some Great Talent, I Envy It.
Make's My Poems Look Rubish:P Haha.
I Love your Style Of Writing, And How you Just Say All That you Need To Say.
And Also A Very Nice Flow=D
5/5
Can You Comment And Rate One Of My Poems Too? That Would Be Great!
Much Love, Jessi<3

:) no makes sense for me too!
I just love the uniqueness of your poetry!
it is nothing like common...the wording is always special..and u have an undefinable style !

The coherence in ur words is incredible and the creativity is touchable..If i was you i would do anything but giving up on poetry!

write evn wen u dnt have ink!
5/5 SURe for a poem like this

Aw, oh I loved this:)

I used to be a Tomboy and was never home. And we always played the Dutch version of Hucleberrry Finn, ha ha. Me, my brother and our best friend Sven, we were the Three Musqeteers, ha ha ha. It was our way of escaping a bad situation at home and I can truly say all good memories I have of my childhood, are those I made outside, playing with my friends.

Indescribable passion of smells
lungs full of natures essence
A closing window into scenes begone

^^
I understand why you used begone, but also "scenes in sepia"would do nicely here.

Thanks for the trip down Memory Lane, Nick:)

5/5 Ingrid