The Setting Sky(Double Tanka)

by Jad   Sep 23, 2010


Imagery blinds sight
With many brilliant colors:
Reds, blues, and purples,
Abstract creativity
Displaying natures beauty.

Painting these pictures,
Throwing ideas all around.
Tearing clouds open
Provoking hearts to wonder
Against the vast open space.

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Tanka is a classic form of Japanese poetry related to the haiku with five unrhymed lines of five, seven, five, seven, and seven syllables. (5, 7, 5, 7, 7)

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  • 14 years ago

    by Ingrid

    This was really nice, Austin..The only thing was that it somehow was very much the same as a poem you wrote recently ( the coming day). That does not make it less beautiful off course, but I would like to see you stepping outside the box a little more:)

    You did this well, good work

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 14 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    Quite agreeable..

  • 14 years ago

    by Soft Parade

    Tanka is my current favourite form all down to you Jad. This poem is spectacular. Simply put images in the mind of vastness and an ever changing painting. I really thought 'tearing clouds open' was inspired. Brought me back to Australia where the sunsets are just as you have described.

  • 14 years ago

    by Ronald Edwards

    Jad,

    Most certainly one the best Tanka's I have read in a long time thanks for sharing

  • 14 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    You are working into a great poet, exploring and trying new forms. I use to try a new one every week but it's been a while for me. Maybe your work will inspire me to try again
    well done friend

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