Comments : Do you Love Me?

  • 14 years ago

    by PorcelainMoon

    "I love you,
    But do you love me?
    Even in my dreams,
    You still say no.
    I try to talk,
    But I think I'm losing my voice.
    Can you hear my cries?
    Can you feel me breathe?
    I don't think I exist"

    Perfect imagery portrayed in these opening lines, so I congratulate you, I can see the true emotion in this for example your line "I don't think I exist" such a sad line but the sadness is justified, worthlessness is a killer. 5/5

    yours truly, Dean.