That was really heart-breaking...
i really liked it...

Very beautiful. Flows nicely. Sounds like it is spoken from the heart. Wonderful poem!

It's truly an amazing poem. It seems like it might be a song, but either way it is Simply Amazing!

Thank you!and to your_crimson_saviour; there are 2 or 3 lines from a song,but I edited it so it will be more my words,and the rest are completely my own words. x

All of your starting "your" need to be "you're" Other than that I thought this was a nice piece, though I would give credit to the inspiration.

Thank you for pointing that out,Beautiful_chaos I will fix it:) yes I have gotton a few lines from a song, but the flow,stanza and idea,rhyming, meaning/story behind the poem was my idea:|(not the song.)

Paige, this poem is really good! :) i have missed reading/critiquing your work. as i read this piece, i could tell when you were writing it, you were emotional, or at least thats the feeling i had. i love the way it all flowed together, and the imagery is wonderful! :) thank you for sharing this with us. i don't see any flaws here at all. 5/5 katie <3