Comments : Our Vanity

  • 14 years ago

    by Maverick

    I really love this piece, and I think the best part is near the start when you talk about the past we keep reliving is leaving us for dead. That's really poignant, well done. This resonates very strongly with me. Well done !

  • 14 years ago

    by Lu

    Great opening Jenn!
    The flow is awesome and in such few words you gave the reader much to think about.

    Our love just lays here rotting
    We fight for it no more
    I wonder if we'll wake up
    Or sleep forevermore
    ^^^
    Feel ya here hun

    Great read Jenn ... your pen is on fire girly!

  • 14 years ago

    by Daisy if you do

    The flow is definitely impeccable, and the message more relative to many than we may want to admit. Very strong words and you have done a great job with this. Definitely a great read!

    Take Care,
    Kay