I like this piece it was not my favorite but it was good. For my taste I guess I like darker things more suffering pieces but that is just me. I liked it and I am going to read more of your pieces.

Kortney

This was good, I like it even though I would suggest moving it to the sadness section because it's not very dark. Still a nice piece, I like how its a story with a lot of imagery but it's not wordy very good

I loved this! But it almost felt disjointed when I was done... Like it was two poems put together. I loved the beginning but by the time I was to the end if felt like the point had changed. If you meant to do that to represent the feeling before you know death, and the darkness that takes you after it did that beautifully... The flow, the word choice, the rhyme pattern all felt more sharp by the end, but the last line was softer and it fit more with the beginning of the poem. I can't figure it out and that makes me like it even more. Keep up all the good work and I hope you don't tak my comments badly, me being a hard critic is usually a sign that I enjoy your work and want to see you get better :-)

A good poem, I'm surprised that it hasn't received higher votes. 5/5 from me though.

Some poems grab you as a reader from the first line. I find this is how your poem was.
You have imagination and it's original. Good work

Nice poem.

I felt as though the author really had a near death experience... well penned

Ugh...-Grimacing Deeply-....Your poetry always knows how to make my stomach twist in knots...I think it's still twisting...
It's dark...very dark, You paint a crystal clear image, I'd rather NOT have stuck in my head, but with all due respect, you're a terrific writer!!

5/5
and there is hope for you.