Dealt Deaths Deed

by Soft Parade   Sep 29, 2010


Standing still, I stumbled senselessly over the hill of my will.
Irrational emotion eradicated my brains ocean.
Thrilling chills emanate through my quill, emancipating my bill.

Noticing a notion prompting promotional devotion.
Our flawless laws fair laughably compared to natures paws.
Robust rotation among rounds of relentless probation.

Perceive a claw; perfectly raw, heretic-ally terrific awe.
Cruel creations of the mind send the blind to a crematorium grind.
Drawing out the beast to gnaw on the yeast-less feast with his jaw.

My cells maligned; ceaselessly redesigning chemical binds.
This pestilent disease disregards my dismal heeds to leave me the keys.
Thoughts are defined, memories aligned, distraught at the find!

An acceptant breeze fills with ease my temples needs overseas.
Control of my tower coughs forth the courage of my dours' power.
Weak at the knees...muscles seize...fading wheeze...Deaths squeeze.

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The form is in Terza Rhyma making up 15 lines in total.
There is also 15 syllables in each line.
This is the form I used, not sure if it is formally known as one, if it is please let me know.
I also made use of aliteration throughout inspired by E.A.Poe.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Love Panda

    Loved reading every line. Your terminology is excellent and really had me hanging on every word! It is written so beautifully, even if it is about death. Some say death is beautiful, reading this, it is. IBE

  • 14 years ago

    by Keleena

    While reading this it made me think of Poe - before I saw what you said at the bottom, so I think you hit the nail on the head with that one. The wording has a way of tangling up the simplified to make it deeper and more expressible, which I love. I also thought each stanza very complementary to one another making it all fit together so very nicely. Thanks for sharing.

  • 14 years ago

    by Chris

    Quality poem. Had to look up words and think about some things since my vocabulary isn't what it used to be, but that's a good thing lol. It helps me improve. I can feel the struggle that the poem expresses and relate and a good read.

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