Hmm, I liked the idea behind this poem a lot. The first thing I really noticed about the poem that was unique is you were focusing all on time and its properties. A creative way to go about writing this piece. Second was the provoking ideas you give in this poem. Thirdly you gave imagery to time by saying very creative lines like "discarding seconds" which gave your poem a more professional look to it. Great job and keep writing.

Wow, I was really impressed with your write. You have done a marvelous job of this. The imagery and metaphors were hand in hand on this one. There were too many favorite lines for me to add one, the whole piece just seemed to fall together. Excellent piece.

Take Care,
Kay

Wow this is such a deep, stirring read.
I completely love every line, its so thoughtful.

This is great.

Well done.

I love the language, the usage of the word pendulum and the emotions portrayed, a very unique piece!

Good work,

5/5 Ingrid

Mondays suck...thats all this poem should of said hahahah jk!
this was soooo different I absolutely loved how you worded this poem!
Very unique piece I really loved it

A poem well written, wording and the emotions of blah worked well as that is what I think you were creating it to be.
good read

A pendulum hums
minutes of a week's span,

^^I am an admirer of the very 1st 2 lines of this poem..THe title it self was amazing..
I just think the word hums, was perfect..

each littered carelessly -
'til thrown onto heaping piles
of departed time...
^^I love the wording..it's kind of flowlessss
Tender, clear and poetic..

yet I find myself
trudging through
these recycled days -
along with mannequin souls
of which emotions
have become tethered.
^^Strong strong..strong stanza,
reflecting ur emotions in a very related way.
I feel like being bored and smothered by the routine of our everyday.. U have given me diff images through these 2 stanzas. Both are words to relate to!

Discarding materialistic
belongings -
while salvaging
valuable scraps,
in hopes of
alleviating negativity.
^^I think the usage of adjectives was a bit heavy here..i wish u said through pessimist c hopes.. or something smoother..than the way it was that ( the last 2 lines)
but either way, the feelings been still strong..and the message was still being sent.

'cause come Monday...
nothing will remain,
for all is disposed -
^^Wow..amazingly said.

leaving a vacuous space
to fill with rubbish
from life, forevermore.

^^such a sad poem u know..I love it for the clarity of the atmosphere u have written it in a very well way. The relation is perfect between one stanza and the other..
so much loved it <3 5/5