Flower In The Moonlight

by Kuro   Oct 8, 2010


Seed in the soil
hopeful and youthful
like a newborn baby
alone you grow
away from all the others

Flower in the moonlight
beautiful and radiant
like a candle in the dark
alone you bloom
away from all the others

Flower in the moonlight
old and withered
like an unwanted weed
fading alone
away from all the others

Seed in the soil
from the old reborn a new
like a phoenix from the ashes
a beacon for those lost in the dark
chasing the dark away from all the others

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  • 14 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This poem does stand out

  • 14 years ago

    by Sylvia

    My comment is to agree with all the others, there isn't anything left for me to say. Well done.

  • 14 years ago

    by White Orchid

    This poem was amazing!! I loved the metaphor you used to describe it. I think you are a brilliant writer!!!! This poem was just so sad and deep and I thought it was truly unique and amazing. You are very creative and I just loved the entire thing. 5/5. :)

  • 14 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Seed in the soil
    hopeful and youthful
    like a newborn baby
    alone you grow
    away from all the others
    ^^^ben this opening is really gd i love it..made me very curious..and was well penned

    Flower in the moonlight
    beautiful and radiant
    like a candle in the dark
    alone you bloom
    away from all the others
    ^^omg this must be my fav..stanza cause was very poetic..word choice is perfect..and the description is very very poetic...more over the comparison touched my heart !!!

    Flower in the moonlight
    old and withered
    like an unwanted weed
    alone you fade
    away from all others
    ^^^very very sad....omg..BEn this is truly beautiful but sad..
    i suggest saying:
    like an unwanted weed
    fading alone
    away from all the others

    Seed in the soil
    from the old begins a new
    >begins? im sure u can find a better one
    cause the next line which is

    like a phoenix from the ashes
    ^^^IS FANTASTIIIIIIIC!!!!!!!!!!

    a beacon for those lost in the dark
    chasing the dark away from all the others
    ^^^wat an ending....u blew my head off....
    i think u have done a realy gd job over here..a very sad poem..which ends in a very unexpected msg

    5/5!!

  • 14 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    Very nicely penned. the metaphors and the ability to take us from point a to point b in an enjoyable read