by Love Panda
A nice little read. IBE |
A really strong, confident and interesting piece you have here. I must admit, I would've gladly given this a 5/5 rating, but I just felt that the second half wasn't up to the same standard because they were all the same rhyme. I think if the structure would've stayed at couplets, and at the same length, this would easily be a 5/5. It actually reminds me of Shakespeare, not exactly sure why, though. Perhaps it's where each line breaks, which is what I found so fascinating about this piece. |
by Soft Parade
Thanks Brad, I had in mind when writing the poem that towards the end my mind was racing at the thought of the subject and tried to use the same rhyme to give the sense that it was picking up pace. |