All I can say is this is a masterpiece

Oh my, simple fantastic. Very discriptive and the imagery is great. I really enjoy my read. So far one of the best poem i red in weeks. Very well done, kel.

"nor I can move mountains"
- nor do i move mountains sounds better i reckon

"with the blink of an eye"
- I dont think this part is really necessary, it kind of sounds awkward being there.

That third last stanza about the forest in the night really blew me away nana! Such a strong ending to this piece! Great work!!

This an amazing poem! You did a really great job!! You have a very strong vocabulary. You words just sucked me right in. (I'm not sure if you saw the comments I gave Britt but like i said: ) I don't really enjoy writing free verse but You have done a wonderful job captivating me with your words.

This is my favorite line:

Although I do not light the forests at night
nor I hail the spirits of the dead.
But I have immortal dreams..
Emerging from my past, toward my future
Flowing; unlike you amid each fragile
moment that passes me by like the wind
in winter

^I could clearly picture this in my head and you did such a great job choosing each word oh so carefully.

Great Job, Keep it up!
5/5

Something about the wording of this kept me reading, kept me interested. It had a strong opening, describing dreams and desires in an original way. I liked the tone and pace too, I think you get away with not having much puntuation as it is as if you are speaking. Nice read