by liiz
Thank you for my comment and rate! |
by KemistryKia
I LOVE THIS |
by Sylvia
Smiling through the tears is something that at sometime in our lives we have all done. The only suggestion I would have is not to capitalize the first letter of each word, especially him and he since that usually indicates a reference to God. (Only capitalize him and he at the beginning of a sentence.) Keep writing. |
by Sunshine
I think you have poured all your feelings in this poem. |
by Carmen
Beautiful job. This poem is so vulnerable. I love how strong you are, like not letting him push you down and not giving him the satisfaction. You are a great poet. Keep writing, dear! |
by Chris
A really great poem. I especially enjoy how I can relate to it. It's true that when we're betrayed we can't let it show how it affected us. We gotta move on and become even stronger. |
This is really good. |
This poem shows your real talent as a poet. |
For starters, take the apostrophe out in your title, it should read "I Smiled Through the Tears" |
by Siglawoo
Amazing one.... and i am sure you meant " dignity " instead didnity in the 2nd last line. |
I really like this poem it shows strength and determination, the rhymes are really good and just generally the way its written really great poem =] |
by Lady Nik
I think this could have been better if it was a free verse poem because the ryhmes felt forced. The message was clear your delivery just wasn't at the same level. Keep writing though. Nik |
by ericbow
Nicely done! |
by Mikaela DLC
There were some typos but, the emotions and wittiness of the poem is splendid^^ |
by Daisy
Your titles are very interesting and I can relate to many of them, especially this one. It seems as if we both have gone through something similar. I like how you mention that we smile through tears. Sometimes we take a chance at something, like love, that ultimately doesn't work; and although it hurts, we still "smile through tears" because we were sincere.... |
by H E Losey
A plethora of punctuation errors and the rhythm fluctuates. |
I know there r technicalities to writing however I still believe ...if u bring emotion to an individual in ur writing you've accomplished ur goal....such emotion this brought to me...love it |
by Ali Khan
I love it!!! reminds me of someone!!! :) a vote for u 5/5 |
by RustySoul
This poem carried your emotions well with an optimistic end to it... Good work... :) 5/5 |
by BlueJay
Wow. This is amazing. It is short and simple, yet still intriguing all the way through. It has emption and story and an excellent word choice to convey your point and your voice within the piece. So many poems are written just the same as this, but somehow, I am not sure how, this is very unique. You have penned a marvelous piece. 5/5 |