A Rose Amongst Men

by Cam M   Oct 25, 2010


We came, we fell
a battle call
aroused, but one by one
and in the dust of Myrtledoor
a rose so simple, earth sprung

they crowed round, those men of arms
and made as if to take
the ring that formed, of innocent awe
a moment passed, shared by all
and breath so baited 'twas swore

the walls did shake,
the heavens open,
the mother gave of her life
and little ones, which sprouted forth
carrying their nascent call as to Fife

battle-hardened, weary men
together, they rose as one
swept of the embers with shaken hands
drew a bead a final time
to unite, once disparate lands.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Such a sad poem and the ending just sums
    up all the feelings and pain about war; and a
    delicate rose in the midst of all this to symbolise human life..beautifully penned.
    Congrats on the win!

  • 14 years ago

    by Ingrid

    I agree with Britt, this is well written indeed. It paints a vivid picture of the hell called war.

    Well done!

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 14 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Definitely a winner for me - I just loved the imagery , it was definitely excellent and there was a sort of tone that made me even more interested , each line really tugged at my heart. Haven't read a poem like this in quite some time, I think I do agree with the punctuation, some commas aren't needed, it would make the flow a bit more smooth if some were removed, I think one quick read through you'll be able to find the ones that aren't necessary. An awesome write, one to be recognized.

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