Jad, overall a sad piece but heard more often than not. Second to last line might flow a bit better as |
by Sylvia
Austin looks like the writers block has lifted. This is wonderful and the message is sad. One I understand all to well. |
by Sunshine
Jad this is expressed very well. |
It's hard to accept the fact that someone lies when you never thought they ever would, it hurts but you learn to move on and realize you are better off without them. An emotional, well done piece. |
by Lonely Rider
Touching write... the feeling of lonleiness and betrayal is well expressed. |
by Dreamofolwin
A heartfelt piece, Lol. So well written and expressed. Love your writing and how you can so draw the reader into your thoughts and feelings with your words... |
by Anisa
Abosolutey lovely! really liked it.. will read it again lol keep it up :D |
by Ingrid
A very sad poem, I can feel your pain, it just oozes from the screen.. |
Wow... Amazing poem! So heartbreaking and sad... it really touched me.. I can relate to the feelings you've expressed in this poem. It's really hard to go through such feelings.. and you've expressed them so perfectly. Very well-wrtten! Great job! |
Wow, I feel at loss for words. This was very emotional and everything you have expressed in this poem, the bitter pain, practically dripped off the lines, but it wasn't over-done by any means. The word choice warmed my heart and also instilled in me that feeling of brokenness and hurt that results in these lies. But we must get back up again. I really felt a connection when reading this and you weren't just writing, you were living and giving all of your soul. Really well done, I have to look at more of your work. Please keep it up :) |