A simple love poem with ones emotions written all over it. I have seen many poems like this and still I think you came at it in a new angle which good because most love poems are becoming too cliched. Anyway you did a great job on this poem and keep writing.

What a total change of style Miss Yaki.
Such poetic growth you have shown over the past few months. I am soooooooo proud of you !!!

Discover
-within me-
The joy painted on my face
When your shadow is near
^^^
I love this part. It's like saying the joy has spread beyond your face in to the entire you.
Lovely

Beautifully woven words of love ... with sweetly sprinkled imagery.

Wonderful job Yaki !!!!