Mid-Summer Stroll

It's good, it's not to in depth and the poem has a light, airy feel to it. But at the same time its cheerful in a way because it brings out the simpler joys of love.

I enjoyed how you started it asking for a walk, but went on to describe walking with her forever. What I personally got from this, is the fact that you took a chance on a "walk" and discovered shes the one you want to "walk" with the rest of your life.

"first a midsummer stroll;
'gainst a crisp autumn wind
'fore the soft kiss of snow. "
^Beautifully written

Jessie

Your eyes can brighten
my most dismal of days,
your smile would chase
dark storm clouds away...
You are so beautiful!
Like I have never seen!
Shall we walk? Not once;
but many times; and again?
Your hand in mine
first a midsummer stroll;
'gainst a crisp autumn wind
'fore the soft kiss of snow.
Through the park, past the meadow...
towards the bridge 'round the bend
Can we walk on?
From now
'til times end?

This was perfectly simple but it wasn't another meaningless ballad that displays cliche after cliche. You didn't need fancy rhyme or sophisticated length, for the way of your words flowed smoothly and created such lovely peace. I loved the idea of not walking once but until the end of times. I thought that was unique because in my mind not only the physical action of walking but continuing the journey follows me. Lovely interlace between autumn and winter, two gems like the romance you have described with this one. Beautiful work, thank you for sharing.

God bless you always!

MaryAnne

Nominating*

Fantastic..!! such a very great job.. I am such a fan of this poem that been flowing in an unbelievable way.

the simplicity which you really made a deep poem out of it.. romantic..love full..passionate and strong.

So much love, and a lot more sweetness and that taste of romance.

5/5 I'll be nominate this poem!