Nana, I was simply overpowered by these lines that you have written that evidently dripped with sadness and colliding emotions like that one. The emptiness you feel in this poem is so deep and the way you have written this poem pulls the reader in and they don't realize they are reading until the end and then they have to read it over. Once again you have blown me away with your work. I love how you keep your poetry simple yet the depth in which you speak is almost daunting.

"Or did it simply vanish, leaving for me behind ;
nights of misery twinkling with fear ?
Leaving me nameless, denied
without the innocence of a smile to outline the sadness
featured on my face.
Without the echoes of a single laughter to tell about me .."

This had to be my favorite stanza as it did portray that sadness of being alone or simply feeling there is no reason for our exsitence. The fear you express in these few lines I am sure have been felt by other but still wonder how people are able to get through them. All in all I am simply amazed by how great this poem is and how you are growing as a poet. Wonderful job and keep writing.

Wow... this poem is so well-written and touching... I didn't know what to expect and it was so heartbreaking.. My favorite part about it was the ending... You ended it so cleverly and it really made the poem stronger. Extremely well done! Great job hon!

Sometimes when we dig too deep, we lose ourselves, Nana. A mind can get lost within the thoughts that can consume it, if we don't watch out.

Do tell that I died, to heal and free my denied self from it.
That I became a part of the illusion, that it's joy is still a part of!
That while searching for it, I became a part of my own imagination

-that no longer exists-

^^

This was very beautifully written ( the whole poem was), but so intensely sad hunniiii:(

They say we never lose the most vital thing: ourself. I hope and pray you won't. It is a cold, heartless world out there, but with friends* winks* it is bearable.

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

You never cease to amaze me and this poem took my breath away

Amazing. I love it, well done! :)

The ending was yet again powerful. It's not easy to search for happiness, as a matter of fact we really shouldn't have to, we should be able to find it within ourselves without searching. Although this was a relatively long poem, it was expressed to the fullest degree. I will not pick it apart, for I don't see that would make any sense to. I like it as is, awesome job.

Such a deep poem with deep thoughts it just
pulls the reader into this world of questions..I especially liked this stanza:

Or did it simply vanish, leaving for me behind ;
nights of misery twinkling with fear ?
Leaving me nameless, denied
without the innocence of a smile to outline the sadness
featured on my face.
Without the echoes of a single laughter to tell about me ..

I can just picture the whole thing and feel like I am on a path searching...excellently written!

I look for it between tumbling lines of fugitive lost memories
and amid words written by the passion of a dry pen's tip.
I search for it wherever I find dead naked trees;
somewhere beneath a dry past Autumn .
There at the top of a crumbling horizon ,
and at the depth of a slavish, perfidious ocean.

This first stanza really stood out from the rest of the poem, you have painted a most vivid picture here, I was in pure awe by the end of this stanza! The entirety of the poem complimented this beautifuly, down to where you become a part of your own imaganation. I could feel the emptness, the sorrow, though I could not grasp the pureness. Our founders wrote it best, All men have the right to pursue happiness, they state nothing of achievment. 5/5