A lot of people don't like these kinds of writes, but I can relate to them and when done properly sometimes unless you have personal knowledge you would not entirely decipher that it was a cutting poem. I like the story behind your piece, but the flow is a little rough, keep your syllable count a little more structured. Over all a nice job.

This is really good. i think its tragic but symbolizes hope at the same. its very good presenting raw emotion to your reader. you've summed it up greatly.

Very in-depth

Amazing story behind it. Good job

This was absolutely amazing! This definitely made me put you on my fav poets list. Just fantastic! Vivid and captivating. The progression was perfect and easy to follow. Just a great piece!! :) 10/5