Comments : They Who Sleep Need Little Air

  • 14 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Mmhh, very interesting work..I like how it is unusual and very provocative.

    Well done, keep writing.

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 14 years ago

    by Jad

    What a wonderful and thought provoking write. I found this very interesting and unique. The way you went about describing things was great and there was some imagery also I found that I liked. The simplicity of this poem makes it very enjoyable and also how it makes a person think. All in all, you did a great job with this poem and also I would like to congratulate you on your Win. A truly deserving poem. Great job and keep writing.

  • 14 years ago

    by Lu

    Congrats on your front page win.

    You cannot be heard. That is
    what happens when you
    don't make a
    sound.

    At night the wind sounds like winter.
    ^^
    Truly LOVED this ending

  • 14 years ago

    by silvershoes

    Excellent line breaks. This poem is immense in its depth and intricacies. You've tied in remnants of fleeting, seemingly unrelated wonderings into a concise, strong introspective and relatable piece. I found myself wondering afterward. Very pleasant, thank you.