A thought provoking poem that did make me think several times over as I read through the poem over and over. The depth in which you write shows your maturity which is high compared to most poets your age I think. Also the big overall metaphor was really great and I was taken in by it. You used simple words though to convey a big message which is what I think adds to the beauty of this poem and I am overall glad I was able to read this poem. You are improving as a poet every time you write a new poem and I would have to say that you will do a great job in poetry throughout all your life, who knows. Anyway this poem really shows your talent at writing and I don't want to start repeating myself. :P Great job and keep writing.

I have loved the profoundity of your poem here. I love poems under this section a lot, yet not all that I read inspire me...unless it;s by those who I have a crush over their work,.and yours was really thought-provoking..and ad u already know..perfectly worded..

time lapses as
thoughts stream
like oncoming traffic -
suppressing chances
of passing within
restricted boundaries.
^^^thought ur ending was incredible but I loved the word choice here..u have used most of my favorite words.. Those, that I really love to read and feel in poems.. and ur usage was perfect and served your purpose

it is but a test
of stamina -
hidden beneath
layers of courage
of which only you -
can discover.

^^^I think this was wise, well said..well worded..strongly stated.
deserves overall a 5 out of five..