I really liked this poem when I read it and seeing that you are the author almost doesn't surprise me. Your work as always has great imagery in it and the depth in which you put into this poem. The way you went about writing this poem was creative and unique as far as the structure. The flow was perfect and really kept the readers attention from the very beginning to the end. Great job and keep writing.

I please dnt wanna repeat everything I said b4 i was timed out looooool...but let me tell u..i am not a fan of thy and thee either.. but i love how u used them to ur sake..it worked well for the flow..was like some lines rhymed too much..in a gd way tho.

I love the way you expressed ur self again..and it had a darker side..so i read it again..i love the images..very peotic..and i loved britts comments and interpretation

-i love it when everything fits 2gather lol..

epsi depsi tempsi 5/5

I loved how you used "thy" and "thee", it was extremely clever and took me by surprise. The words you breathed on this paper were exquisite, and the images were so striking. The title was simple but conveyed the whole theme of your piece,

"as black spots cover me
- from head to toe -
food sparingly dangles
along with thine voice."

Love the description and thought of the last two lines, when put together they add a lot of provoking depth.

"my life withers."

three hitting words, I just loved how you expressed yourself so profoundly here!

Thanks for sharing as always.

MA

Excellent poem written in the true form as only you can do.