This poem was so awesome, and I am not joking. I love the way you have this poem written by going from positive to negative and then you end in possible hope. The emotions were many in this poem and I found them all special and the depth in which you write shows the maturity in the lines you have written.

"You were
burnt out; swept under
the carpet of time's undoing.
You were
an ashen memory,
vague against the blazing spirit
I knew you to be."

This was my favorite stanza and I was really taken in by it. This poem shows one thing that you had all throughout your poem and that is imagery. The imagery in this poem was simply amazing and it painted a picture in the readers head as he read the poem. very unique and creative. Great job and keep writing.

This was wonderful, I loved the repetition of you 'you were' it was extremely effective throughout. It's difficult to go into detail, but for such a lengthy poem it definitely holds the reader's attention completely & throughout...awesome job.