Sorrow

by Rachel RTVW   Nov 16, 2010


He spends each day with me
Although I didn't ask

Creating such difficulty
With the simplest task

Hard enough to focus
Consume my every thought

Just cannot defend myself
From all that he has brought

No where left to run
No haven safe to hide

So I'm left to drown
with sorrow by my side

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  • 13 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    This poem was amazing it was short but it contained a lot of emotion and really spoke not only to the readers mind but to their heart too

    5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by chind

    GREAT WRITE! This was short, yet powerful, which tells us you dont need a lot of words to express and create something great! I think your rhymes worked very very well here which also added to the flow of this piece. A powerful write. Well done!

  • 14 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Such a flawlessly flowing poem!!
    A read venting with a unique pace!
    the word choice was perfect, unforced, and extremely fantastic.

    I love your opening lines a lot, I feel this blaming tone in your words, when you mentioned how he spends his time with you, though you did not ask for it!

    your sadness is extremely obvious in your ending lines..I just love the clarity and the relation(conxn) between your thoughts.

    It's the one way a reader can feel the real sense of poetry.
    Well Done.
    Gr8 poem!! 5.5

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