by Sylvia
As I read this, many situations arose in my mind, people being forgotten and put on the shelf, a favorite toy, keepsakes, the list goes on. Gives the reader many options. Well done. In this line, where the welcome mattes out, I think mattes should be spelled mats, not sure though. |
I do belive yopur right :-) thank you |
by Jad
This was a nice poem that had many emotions spread across the lines. The message of the poem could be related to a lot of things, which Sylvia listed off, that we put somewhere out of reach as to forget about it because of the pain or hurt or some other region. I believe your poem was leaning more to a human perspective on how someone might like you one minute and then the next they just throw you away or like you said, put upon a shelf to be forgotten about. Overall a great poem that was quite sad and an enjoyable read. Great job and keep writing. |
A poem of sadness touched in hope. I really enjoyed the read. We all have sad times and emotions that hit botttom, but if the hope is there things change |