Taken

"It only spoke of what love gave
Never what it took"
- how interesting to think of it like this, and how right you are! A great ending to this piece, it really brings it together.

This piece automatically caught my interest because of the rhyming (Big fan) I think your rhymes worked well here, adding to the flow of the piece, and it didnt seem forced in any way which is a PLUS!

Well done on a great write!

I love the profoundness of this poem.
A deep right, which reflect your mature personal insights.

I really enjoyed it a lot, I loved the word choice and the usage of them which helped you achieve coherence as much as having a great flow!

was a pleasure to read!

5/5

Jenn, I loved the idea if this poem. the rather realistic view of love vs. the story one. the sense of being betrayed but what you've read or misleded or misinformed also added much to this.

It's like you're confused, like you're talking and rationalizing and reasoning with yourself and you took the reader step by step with you.

I guess we've all been through that, the feeling that we did read and know what's been said and all to know about love, we've all had our share of fairy tale-ish ideas and feelings but then comes the shock and you know it's isn't like that but you know more that this wasn't what you've bargained for, not the pain or the break up or betrayal or any of the consequences. we just wanted the feeling. endless, undemanding, painless and unconditioned.

A great write, Jenn and a greater deal of wisdom shines throw this in a rather simplistic way. I am sure everyone can relate somehow.

I've read once that love is like a bank account, you have to put it in it and invest in it for it to grow and remain. both people of course and not just one. so maybe that's were we are off?

"I watch my lover, love another
That wasn't in the book
It only spoke of what love gave
Never what it took"

Great way to end it

I love this,sad read though.. I like how u incorporate a book very original nicely done! Thumbs up (Y)