My Last Breath

I feeling this small snippet has potential to make a greater poem. I like how this ends leaving you wondering. I think you should work on this one more and make more of it. Although it is nice by itself too. :)

Ya i did the same in ma frst few poems :)

Haha its fine. that was before i started getting into poety and my mind wasnt as open as i guess it could have gotten

Its soo simple.....n easy too get :)
nice one......its jst lil too shrt i guess :)
no offense :)