Wow....i REALLY like this one

Wow! you've really showed passion in this poem... I can feel your determination and fire. I liked the way you entered conversation into the poem, but you need to organize it a bit more... meaning you need to have the lines put after each other in a dialog fashion, like how plays are written down. Also, try to balance the number of lines in the dialog.
I can see the connection between this poem and the other two, the first is hopes, then fear and this one is determination. Still, I think the link is a bit weak in this one... show who the characters are... I understand you're the savior, who is the voice? is it her? or someone else... and if so how do you link her to the two people in the conversation, because being in the other two she needs to come up in this one... But that's only my opinion.
I hope to see more chapters to see where the story is going...keep it up.

I can feel the fire and strength. That is no doubt, but Dark secrets is right, the connection to the first chapter is lost. Unless I have to keep reading. I dont know who the voice is, but other than that, amazing poem. thank you again

REally awsome poem i love it :)

I have read this over a couple times. Your flow is excellent , theme and wording well put together to keep the reader interested. what talent you have for bringing your imagaination to the forefront of enjoyment