Comments : Unrequited Office Lust (Revised)

  • 13 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    It a better piece, and I'm glad you filled out the story. At first, when I was reading the first couple of the new lines, I thought it was all just going to be sexual, but it didn't continue, and so I was glad.

    Brad

    P.S. Please comment and vote honestly on every poem that you read.

  • 13 years ago

    by Lori

    Beautifully written. I loved how well the words flowed :) great word choice as well!

    Great work!

  • 13 years ago

    by D

    I like this, good flow :)