Amazing job! the first stanza set the scene brilliantly =)
Your ability here to tell a story with such a consistent flow was very skilled and flawless in style!
I very much enjoy your work please do continue to write ^^
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I really like this poem and it's basic lay out made it really easy to get along with. I like the ideas you wrote into this poem as it created a sense of security as we have in our cities but then you have as it were the good and bad of a city fighting it out. I loved it all. :] There were parts that made me see many images that made the poem seem more real as I was able to place myself within it.

"It takes place in a city,
Perhaps it resembles yours,
It had people, parks places,
Sidewalks, signs, stores,"

This, by far, was my favorite stanza as it is so simplistic and yet one can envision a city with parks and all the other stuff you have said. All in all I was thoroughly impressed with this poem. Great job and keep writing.