I'm with Britt on her comment. The form you did with this poem was truly amazing and also the alliteration was creative and unique. I love the flow of the poem as it went right with the poem. Lastly I would like to say this poem shows your maturity as a writer as you are able to make great poems like this with seemingly little effort. Great job and keep writing.

Waw..........MIKE...you are incredibely talented ! I just love how strong this piece is...
We gotta discuss it in PMS..I wanna know the inspiration behind eahc single line.

Incredible work.
5/5
as always