A very strong and emotional poem. I loved how you went about the large metaphor for the poem an making it like a fight for survival. There were many emotion but the ones I felt the most were sadness, pain, remorse, and even a release from this world. The imagery you use in this poem is also very vibrant. It creates images in my head that I am able to see as I read through your poem. The flow was right on and I don't think there is one thing I would change in your poem. Great job and keep writing.

Nice work Nik. There is a sense of darkness and sadness to your words. Human's do have a way and it is not always a good way. The saying of sink or swim came to mind in the later verses and really that is how life is, we can either sink or swim through all the stuff and survive. Well done.

Nicely done Nik, each word provided the reader with a new thought and a sense of wonder. awesome