I felt the structure and the beginning and the end was off, and to be honest, when I began reading this, I was very tempted to just stop reading because the flow was so awkward. But then I read a few more lines and it go better. Then towards the end, it broke down again.

I liked the overall suject matter and the way you approached it, and in that middle section, I actually enjoyed it.

Brad

P.S. Please comment and vote honestly on every poem that you read.