by Miss Sunfire Dec 6, 2010
category :
Life, society /
meaning of life
I pass the time with ease |
I personally feel you put too much effort in making the rhymes than the content and wording of this piece. I can see you have a telent for rhythm and rhyme, which is very good, but I feel if you could accompany that with stronger content, then I believe this piece could be much bolder. |