Haunting Me Tonight

by silvershoes   Dec 7, 2010


Small breaths at the base of my neck
tingling down my spine
with your
hands sliding around my shoulders
as lips barely brushing
electrified skin
raise our hairs and forget to breathe

Hunched over at my desk
4am
my face is in my hands and I
wonder where you're hiding
and how you haunt me
still
years after you left

The seconds pass infinitely
taken back into flashes
of buried memories

I love you forever and then some
(i love you i love you i love you)
but you lied

Didn't you?

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  • 14 years ago

    by YoYoLoverJSRF

    THIS IS EXCELLENT.

  • 14 years ago

    by Cassie Cain

    This poem actually made me cry... i felt the pain.. I know how hard it is to forget someone you love but you know, hey this persons not good for me.. its jus you cnt really jus forget someone from one day to another.. good job keep up the good work.

  • 14 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Absolutely stunning imagery in the first stanza that brought the intimacy and love straight to the reader's heart. I loved how you portrayed your emotions by writing about you are up so late at night, wondering why and how such impossible thoughts could appear. The feeling echoed off this page and I thoroughly enjoyed it, the question at the end really made this piece strong and left the reader pondering their own experience or reactions to this. Fantastic work, keep writing always.

    God bless you and your family this Christmas.

    MaryAnne

  • 14 years ago

    by Sunshine

    M out of words. your feelings sound to exceed honesty in this poem...amazing. excellent..and thanks 4 sharing. i wasnt gna comment since i was busy being blown away. but thought to reflect my feelings toward the poem..5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Jad

    This poem immediately blew me away. I love how the first line gives a good feeling of how things used to be or what has already been done and then the second stanza is poured in with sorrowful memories of that day. You wrap it all up with the last stanza wondering why he left.

    This poem was full of many emotions and all of them were heart filled. The flow of the poem was great and I don't think there was one place it was off. The imagery in the first stanza was really great and having it for your first stanza was a great idea as it really pulls the reader in to read more and figure out what's going on. Also the repetition of I love you in the last line was nice, as it added to the desperation of this person.

    All in all, a wonderful message conveyed into this poem. Lot's of emotions and pictures were flashing in my head while reading this and it made it feel so real. Great job and keep writing

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