Comments : Startled

  • 14 years ago

    by Jad

    A sensual poem that I actually found quite enjoyable though I don't like these most of the time. It might have been your wording or something but you really got me drawn into this poem. The message was sweet and to the point about what was happening and all the events were described carefully in this short little excerpt.

    "Birds start welcoming in the morning,
    tucked into leafy homes,
    their voices both shrill and sweet."

    This was my favorite part as it was different from every other stanza. It gave the poem a feel of life in a different sense. The imagery is wonderful in this line and even so more in all the other lines. The flow carried on from one line to the other giving it a really easy read through. Lastly there were a lot of emotions in this piece from the simple love to the deep passionate love.

    In all, I found this poem to be very romantic and emotional, as I have already said. This poem was unique in some ways and different in other but I think I like the whole poem in every aspect. Great job and keep writing.