Nana, this was truly from the bottom of my heart a beautiful poem that I found to be very emotional. I'm sure Britt already said it but I want to say it again, that you have put into this poem a emotion that is striking and so strong that it draws in the reader as he/she reads it and by the end of the poem they find themselves teary eyed. The flow of the poem also was good though you weren't focusing on it much and also you did have some parts that had some good imagery but I know you weren't really directing your poem towards that.

"I want some warm rays for the days of December
and as silence gets colder I'd need a coat to wrap
myself.."

Your first stanza, I would have to say, is my favorite one and I liked how it is so simplistic and shows and portrays what is really needed. There's an innocence in this poem that you have brought out and put to surface that is heartbreaking. If one really thought about it. The things you have describe are indeed things some kids would actually want.

All in all, I found this a very strong and emotional poem that really shows an honest heart, pleading for love to be shown to them. Many messages one could obtain from this but the one I am stuck with is the helplessness of some of the kids in the world today. Great job and keep writing.

I want some warm rays for the days of December
and as silence gets colder I'd need a coat to wrap
myself..
^^^
Such sadness within these lines. Most would think of a coat to shield them from the cold and wind but these lines show the emotional side of the coldness and silence .

I need new shoes, for more crowded roads.
Ones full of people who speak love sincerely..
And perhaps they'd walk these roads next to me.
^^^
I'll take a pair too please. Love gets thrown around so freely yet ... how many times is it sincere and really meant. So sad really!

If not any of these, then I'd like to get a letter from
the dad that I never knew
A letter that's embraced with a kiss.
and ends with a hug
^^^
This part is so heart wrenching. Although I don't know the feeling of not having or knowing my Dad I can sort of relate to the feeling of wanting someone to love me as I love them

And if these are much for myself to have
then a sweet phone call would be enough..
or perchance a visit from anyone

-who knows how to really love.

^^^
And I thought the above was heart wrenching.
Oh my dear Nana ~hugs~ it took me a many years to realize that people walk out of our lives just as swiftly as they walked in.
Most times without a second though or care to who they left behind nor the heart they've crushed.
And what we want and crave most in life ... is to just have someone to love us.

You have released such heartfelt emotion in this write Nana.

~Hugs just for you ~

Nana,

All these things you write about are really just one feeling: you need someone in your life that loves you. To go without is like suffocating in silence. You are not alone, hun..millions of people are alone and some of those have a house full of people every day. It is how you feel inside that determines whether you are indeed lonely. This is not a crappy poem at all, poetry is about sharing emotions and you did.

If not any of these, then I'd like to get a letter from
the dad that I never knew
A letter that's embraced with a kiss.
and ends with a hug

-things I badly miss.

^^
To have a great dad must be the best feeling in the world..I have one who never was one, he was like the third child at our home, stole our food and the attention we so badly wanted from our mum. I don't know which is worse hun..to have a very bad father or no father at all:(

You have me, sweetheart..I don't know how much value you hold to that, but you will always have my love and friendship and my support whenever you need it.

*hugs*

5/5 ingrid

Actually this screams emotions that hide deep in some of our hearts. My wish would be to have my mom just once more with me during the holidays. And someone that would love me for me.
But then :-) both will happen in time, I will be with my mom once again for eternity..love ah now that's another story
well done in every way. It maybe a letter to yourself, but it's a hit with the rest of us

Nana,

I've had the pleasure to read a couple of your poems and I'll admit that when I first opened this I was suprised as usually your writing is quite structured and more poetic, that is in the idea of what people believe to be poetry. This thing that I liked most about this piece was the sinciere tone you used, such elegance and stength behind your words.

Britt is right when she talks of vulnerability. You definitly let your heart express itself and this was an such an emotional piece, I felt like grabbing the sun and giving it to you so you could have those warm rays lol!

My favorite part was this:

I need new shoes, for more crowded roads.
Ones choked with people who speak love sincerely..
And perhaps with those, who would walk next to me

You gave shoes a purpose, the actual purpose, again such a sweet heart because most people these days associate shoes with fasion and you had a purpose for them. Beautiful indeed.

I can relate with a lot of things you want for christmas, this christmas I want to mend a few things.

A lovely write,

Well done.
-Mel.