Utopia.

Utopia
^^Interesting.

when I reached the end of your poem i did realize the strong relation between Utopia ; that doesn't exist ; and the guy of your dreams who doesn't exist either.
>Creative J!

you are that heavenly body
a tantalizing fantasy
an attraction
impossible to resist
^^Very strong emotions;
passion and no bet reflects a high sense
of admiration.Crystal clear; bu you need a semicolon after body and a period after resist; better for the flow and ideas to be more connected .

yet we have not met
but only for in dreams
where you are perfect
^^please add a comma after perfect
and WAW...very touchy and emotional..
I love how many of us may relate to this..

for reality doesn't interfere
the only place
I can call you mine.

^^And here I was taken away by the hurtful love ; and painful truth about your feelings toward that person who you can not be with; well not as far as your words did speak..
But in dreams we can own what ever that we want; and in your case you took dreams as a way to escape reality and find a door to clutch to the only thing that you want and make you happy..

Very neat Jacey; well done.

it is where nobody or
nothing else matters -
you are that perfect dream.

^^well the separations here are perfect and in their place; you kind of summed up the whole poem as well. Yes the perfect dream for the girl that is in your poem; how can it not be perfect when in dreams "her dreams are true"

>Excellent
5/5

We dream of perfect love and yet it is found mostly in our dreams. I like how you put this together , dreams can be ones Utopia, or our worst nightmare same as life.
good write

We all have our thoughts of Utopia. What you have done in this poem, centering around this idea, is quite interesting. I like the way you talk about this person and the only time you see him is in dreams, which is where this person will always be as there is no "real" Utopia. Many emotions were in this piece the most evident one was love and longing. A wonderful piece from start to finish. Great job and keep writing.