Its not finished yet.. its on stand by.. comments and rates will be appreciated and name idea's also :P

I love happy endings which are new begginings I imagine at the last of this great poem

Thanks :) if only i could actually do that for real...

I liked your poem and its form. I took some liberties and hope you won't mind. I took your poem and changed some of the lines. I think if you lost the fist stanza all together your poem would be better. Keep up the good works

Tempted to step off this edge
Where faded memories came to die,
It is sad to think about you
I wish we had said goodbye.

Too late now to gather hopes
There is nothing more to do.
Two feet and toes touch the sand
My heart begs to think of you.

Feeling lost I get light headed,
I can no longer hold youths breath
Life has come to show me
Why love is so close to death.

I shiver naked and scared
There are few things left to feel.
My relief is a wash over me,
All my pain for you has been healed.

I like that.. i would love to write like that to bad im 14 and my mind doesnt work like that yet...

I really love this even though it's really sad
i think you did a great job with this piece!!!
keep it up =]

"I start to get light headed
I no longer can hold my breath
So this is what its like
To be so close to death"

my favorite part of the whole poem. it just stuck out to me and it's beautiful... the whole poem is. I love it!! Very good job

One thing lost, is another gained. Within every scar, healing dwells.