Snowflakes

by Broken smile   Dec 15, 2010


Freezing, crystallizing, dropping from the clouds,
Dancing, spinning, twirling all around.
Flipping, swaying, rocketing down to earth,
Glimmering, shimmering, landing on the ground.
Piling up, all together,
Beautifying our world.
Melting, melting, disappearing,
And then….
Suddenly gone.

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  • 13 years ago

    by Broken smile

    Thanks for the ideas, I myself tend to get lost in my work, so I tend to forget simple things as metaphors and such. :) I would hope that I can contribute these ideas because I want people to get lost in my writing. :)

  • 13 years ago

    by BlackButBeating

    You tend to use a lot adjectives try using more feelings, similes and metaphors that way people can lose themselfs in your work :)

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