I don't have much to say about this poem, aside from one correction and the fact that I loved it. It is a story that I wish weren't reality, however much aware I am of it being so more often than not.

As for the correction, it is in the following line:

Make a move, get a kiss, win her heart: how full proof.

After the semi-colon, it should read "how fool-proof".

Good story,
5/5
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