Luanne,

I know of this process you speak of..the realization of what life really is all about and who you really are.

My deepest thoughts,
unveiled the suffering
of ancient memories
inscribed in tattered dreams.

^^
We all pass on the suffering of our ancestors in one way or another until we become aware of what it is we are doing, and start to do things differently (alas, not all people reach that state!)

A time when verse,
drenched in somber ink
fell silent beneath reflections
of the raven's wings.

^^
Your darkest hour, yes..I know what you are saying here, a very painful process of bringing your inner most pain to the surface, so you can take a good look at it.

In the aphotic voids
between sun and moon,
I began to weave
star dusted fairy tales
upon dying petals.

^^
Re- creating yourself and your future upon the remnants of your past is only for the strongest people here on earth. To feel you ar walking on a rope that is burning behind you, underneath is water and in front of you is a future yet to be discovered..and you cannot do anything but go on.

Suddenly ...
Passages opened
where portals once stood
- unmovable-
Shapeless existence
began to form structure
and reason.

^^
The aha-erlebnis, the moment when allfalls into place, you described it very well.

Immersed in salty waters
of realization,
I knew - I must die
to awaken a life
-worth-
resurrecting.

^^
To let go of your old habits and convictions is such a scary thing to do, yet it is the only way to become who you really are..free of all that is not really (worth being called) "you". It is a process that goes with much salt water ( tears)

Beautiful poem, crazy chickie:)

I hope you still care for me, after all the bad stuff I vented:0) I got rid of my old pains too and feel a new person now.

Have a great New Year, sweetheart!

5/5 Ingrid

Luanne
This piece is so full of darkness, dispair and lonliness. So much sadness crys from your words.

Immersed in salty waters
of realization,
I knew - I must die
to awaken a life
-worth-
resurrecting

What a awesome ending. Yet so very sad.
Excellent job!
Love you
Cindy

Wow Lu sweetie this absolutly blew me away!! This is amazing. Great use of words and flawless flow. Brilliant use of rhytm. I especially like the ending. Amazing, amazing piece. Well done.

Danika
xoxoxx

Whatta powerful and vivid imagery...
absolutely beautiful write... deep thoughful words beautifully weaved together...

//to awaken a life
-worth-
resurrecting. //
the ending is superb.

This poem was really a outcry of emotions from what I read and I am taken away with it. The sadness in the lines are very drenching but I love them. The flow of the poem was smooth and flowed from line to line with ease. The structure was good as well helping the flow stay together. The imagery was really good in this poem as well. I liked how it described the scenery of everything in this poem and how it gave it life as the emotions did.

"In the aphotic voids
between sun and moon,
I began to weave
star dusted fairy tales
upon dying petals."

This was my favorite line or stanza as it gave such a beautiful description, and I love the word choice you have used as it makes it so much deeper in meaning and makes the poem seem more mature. I was really taken away with the whole poem but like I said this one line stood out to me.

All in all, I found this to be one of the more thoughtful and meaningful poems I have read in awhile and I am glad to see we have such talent on this site. Great job and keep writing.

The reader gave a great comment. She understood the words and where they come from.

Yeah yeah I know I posted in the wrong box again. I'm tired .. so go ahead and giggle ... lol

Lu, a very sad write. I liked how you kept this poem raw. I am sure many people will relate to this in one way or another. I have no critique to offer for this poem so 5/5

Luanne
Congrats on your win :) Very well deserved
Love
Cindy

Good word choice and imagery. A very thought provoking piece and such a well deserved win! Congrats my friend!

Fall to pieces to build yourself back up. i find myself wrapped around this. deeply..amazing poem. your words are strong.

Its really beautiful