Crystal, I like this. It would make a compelling pop song. I suggest you start using punctuation. Some poets play games with punctuation, but in this poem, you just look lazy when you say "Ill" instead of "I'll" and "i" instead of "I". Also, pay more attention to the cadence and count your syllables. For instance, consider changing the second "your" (sic) to "you are" to get the tempo right. The last two lines need to go; saying you can't explain is a cheap cliché that looks like it was put there just for the convenience of the rhyme. Overall, a good start! I'd like to see the second draft.

-TC