Night Flyer, you're obviously a better poet than I, so I won't presume to give you tips, but I can give you my impressions.

1) I was distracted by the specific place names. For instance, I found myself thinking "If he's crossing the sea to get to Gibraltar, where must he be now?"

2) There is a contrast between "summer breeze" and "wayward winds". That may be what you intended, but if not, you may consider "playful breeze" or some other construction more compatible with "wayward".

3) Line 8: Remove comma?

4) Line 14: Add period or semicolon?

5) For me, at least, "swirling currents" conjures a violent image at odds with the rest of the poem.

-TC

I liked some of the lines of this poem very much. Very well described, good poem.

Randy, as usual you present us, the readers, with images of other places, your travels. I felt like I was on a boat taking this trip with you. Well done.

Randy
Once again your magical pen takes the reader on an adventure through your mind. I can invision the moon lighting the waters as your boat goes where it will. Leading you on to beautiful islands in the sea.

To islands far, my spirit's drawn
To Malta, Cyprus, and Capri
The swirling currents lead me on
Toward ancient shores of mystery.

I love the swirling currents taking you where they want. A mystery waiting to be seen

So sail, my schooner, cross the sea
And make our way, Gibraltar-bound
On wayward winds of reverie
My treasure island will be found.

Loved the ending and I know one day you will find your treasure island.
excellent job!
Love Cindy

Thank you for all of your comments!!! This poem indicates my life-long dream to visit the Mediterranean and its wonderous islands. My first choice, if I ever win the lottery would be a month long Mediterranean cruise.

I hope you win the lottery Randy :)

Sounds like a lovely place to go to, where the heart will float in happiness..as always your writes are a pleasure to read :)

Through your poem, you have taking my mind to all those island. Just last week i return from the caribbean, and i can tell you that, to be away from home in an island and taste different foods, talk with it's people and simple enjoy it's beauty seems like a paradise. These people no matter what, i notice that their faces wears smiles whenever they meet someone. It's just a joy of living where no time for stress. Well done love it, kel.